Erm
I'm sorry but that was a complete non-story; it just felt like you were trying desperately hard to scare us without thinking hard at all as to how to build any tension. The whole dream sequence part just completely threw me out of the movie and made me feel like this was all some parody, and then you brought in a completely generic-looking monster woman for the "actual" horror part. And the actual horror part? Well the main character, the person the audience should be scared something will happen to, was in absolutely no danger, just standing there breathing weirdly when some girl commited suicide. Then rather than explore the psychology of what it's like seeing someone commit suicide or what the girl might have been thinking when she commit suicide, you just added in a COMPLETELY half-assed "oh hey she's still alive spooky" shot.